Please read my short story!!! easy 10 pts. Im not quite done please be honest?

I love it! Just some friendly criticism though, make sure you proofread it because there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors in there. I picked up at least 6 or 7 while reading it. Also, a "short story" doesn't have chapters. Was that the whole thing? You could probably expand this to be a novel... it would sell very well! I gave you a star for an interesting post :)